For the 'First Showing' I brought along all of the illustration work I have developed over the first week back with my project. Even though I feel like there's pieces that I think aren't working and directions I believe I want to move in etc, I thought it would be beneficial for me to show everything I've been exploring incase something I thought was weaker was actually the piece everyone connected with best or seeing something I've tried sparked an idea for something else I could try etc. I'm glad I made this decision as people really connected with the initial horse character sketches, and suggested that bringing a stronger sense of character into the work could make it more interesting. People also liked the fact that in the horse's POV illustration the car looked like a monster as they felt that this added more humour. Another comment that I received from multiple people was that they really enjoyed the bright colours.
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| My 'First Showing' Set Up |
This critique and feedback session was very helpful as it helped me step back from my work and see how others were responding to it; letting me know what was working, what wasn't working, what needed to be pushed further, and what else I could explore. Coming away from this session already my mind is spinning with new possibilities and problems I need to think about. I suddenly have realised I was already getting to involved in one small avenue (social media) and that I need to take a moment to consider the bigger picture and how I could be more innovative - where else could this project go? I have 12 weeks (11 now!) to work with, so how far can I push myself in that time? I need to step back from just focusing on the illustrations and consider the various methods and mediums I could use to implement these illustrations and actually reach the audience I am wanting to influence.
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| My Feedback Sheet |
Feedback Summary:
- Try developing more of a sense of the characters as they are the interesting part
- Make the comic elements bigger to emphasise the action/reactions
- Add more humour - transforming the motorist (car) into a 'monster' character is starting to get there
- Would animating parts of it add to the storytelling aspect and help convey the problem easier?
- Could there be any interactivity for the audience?
- Could the scope of this project be larger - think about what you can push yourself to produce in 12 weeks and also think about how you can create the most impact for the target audience
- Social media allows the audience to add their own story - could this be utilised in some way?
